We have writen leters to fix some problems around the school
This was mine.
Dear Mr Hall Makauri school
120 king road
Our school is amazing but there are problems in it and we room U and B are trying to fix them, my group has chosen to try and fix the flying fox in the senior playground. We have got some solutions as well, and we know that you are quite good at these things,
One of our solutions is to try to take away the scratches on the flying fox by or putting some sort of spay or scraping it off with a wet cloth or something alike, we were thinking if you know about some spray that can help with rust and apply it to the flying fox.
This will help other future generations and we now you will make the right decision for this problem as an adult,you might even get more than this letter asking for help so please help out with the situation we will be thankful so as so many other people in this school. We are a strong school and can make a good time for our little kids in this place!
We do not want to have kids all over the school bored, sad, nothing to do, and if the playground stays the same it will only get worse and in a blink of an eye it will become a nightmare now tell me do want this school to turn into this mess? Because I certainly don't and I think any sane person would not as well so please help out and turn this school into a living dream!
Yours sincerely Livie Isabella Daniel Kiana and Ava
Hello Livie it's Kiana. I really like your letter. Maybe in the introduction you could explain a bit more about why you choose to write about the flying fox. Also at the end in the yours sincerely bit put commas in between the names. Also to spell Danielle's name it's Danielle not Daniel.
ReplyDeleteThank you kirana,thanks for the feedback.I will keep in mind on how to spell Danielle.
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